Thursday, 10 February 2011

The Treatment

Original Treatment


  1. I'm not sure if I've laid this out correctly or if it's much too long but I just wanted to see if I could get it at least almost there.

  2. Hey Molly - it's late, so I'll be quick.

    Lots of potential here - but I think you can accelerate Act 1; why not have the chef and the princess already aware of each other - or at least, the chef already knows of her situation; he sneaks out to look longingly at her? You always need to be looking for opportunities to condense your plotting and move things along more quickly. I suggest you go at it again, looking for ways to get it cleaner, tighter and always moving forwards.

  3. Okay no problems, I'll get on that. Thanks for the feedback!