Lots of potential here - but I think you can accelerate Act 1; why not have the chef and the princess already aware of each other - or at least, the chef already knows of her situation; he sneaks out to look longingly at her? You always need to be looking for opportunities to condense your plotting and move things along more quickly. I suggest you go at it again, looking for ways to get it cleaner, tighter and always moving forwards.
I'm not sure if I've laid this out correctly or if it's much too long but I just wanted to see if I could get it at least almost there.
ReplyDeleteHey Molly - it's late, so I'll be quick.
ReplyDeleteLots of potential here - but I think you can accelerate Act 1; why not have the chef and the princess already aware of each other - or at least, the chef already knows of her situation; he sneaks out to look longingly at her? You always need to be looking for opportunities to condense your plotting and move things along more quickly. I suggest you go at it again, looking for ways to get it cleaner, tighter and always moving forwards.
Okay no problems, I'll get on that. Thanks for the feedback!
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